I just have a lot of trouble with the techno-babble talk and shit. I can't do it justice!
I figured that part was something that might have happened to you or something you know of someone because it was a very specific detail Yeah, I don't know where this story will end up. But hopefully it ends with none of them dead, LOL. I want it to be a coming of age story being that they're seniors in high school and all. So like 17/18 years old, uncovering some big mystery behind this "Hawke" guy.
Sci Fi is very very open ended which is why I like writing it.
That's kinda what I went with. I took things and characteristics from myself and a friend to give Randy and Todd some character. Like the whole thing with struggling to light the cigarette is something that happens to me a lot. My problem is I never watched a lot of those kind of shows growing up or even now. I can roll with it, will be a good exercise in creativity for me.
You're right Her real name is Trisha (that's what Randy calls her), her nickname is T (that's what Todd [T-Jam] called her), but when writing about her outside of them calling her a name, I call her Triss. LOL. A bit confusing.
I'll try dropping Trisha and stick to Triss, unless you keep Trisha and drop Triss.